Shameem D/O Ahamed Ali Khan
1232 PRH Rd, Singapore 123213
Email: example@eggmail.com
Contact: 9123 1231
September 17, 2012
The Human Resource Department
Gleneagles Hospital6A Napier Road
Singapore 258500
Dear Sir/Ma’am,
Re: Application for Perfusionist Position
I am writing in to
express my interest in the position of the Perfusionist at your hospital.
I am currently in pursuing
a Bachelor of Science in Life Sciences at the National University of Singapore
(NUS). My major has equipped me with the necessary knowledge and understanding
of the human physiology and cardiopulmonary system that this job demands.
My passion for Health
Sciences led me into joining the St John’s Ambulance Brigade in my secondary school
where I had an attachment with Changi General Hospital. As such, I had the opportunity
to learn patient service and nursing skills. As the Welfare Representative in
my college’s English Drama Club, I oversaw the safety of my peer during
practices and camps. During my time at NUS, I was involved in planning an overseas
cultural immersion programme which required me to pay attention to minute
details. I feel that these experiences have deepened my passion for healthcare,
and shaped me into a detail-oriented person.
Working for a distinguished healthcare provider
would be a prestigious start to my career. I am confident that my education, experiences,
and passion for healthcare make me apt for this position. I can be reached at
the aforementioned email and mobile number. I look forward to hearing from your
team soon.
Yours Sincerely,
(signature)
Shameem D/o Ahamed Ali Khan 
Hello Sharmeem =)
ReplyDeleteYour application letter looked professional in terms of the way it presents your experiences from your education to the co-curricular activities you've participated. It is generally very concise and clear in the way you phrased your letter. One thing you may want to consider; you may want to list out some modules you took that specifically teaches you on the human cardiac system. I believe doing that can add some concreteness to the letter and make you stand out from students who do not have such knowledge advantage. I've also noticed your first paragraph indentation is different from the rest. Maybe it is better to indent all the paragraphs the same way and consistently as it makes the letter look neater. A last thing to note will be the signing off. If you had put "sir/mdm" at the front, signing off as "yours faithfully" will be the proper way as "yours sincerely" applies to letters in which the addressee's names are stated.
Anyway, it was such a coincidence that we are applying for the same job! I wish you all the best in your application and may we be colleagues in the future!
Redonnia
Thank you for your comment Redonnia! I am afraid that I have not taken any cardiology module so far! Ooops! And, thank you for pointing out the indentation differences and that it should be Yours Faithfully instead. I always confuse the two. Yes, I wish you all the best for your future, and that you get a career that is best for you! Btw, you have a pretty name:)
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